I showed my two housemates my audio document, They spoke that they enjoyed my voice and felt it was presented very professionally. They wanted to hear sounds and things to introduce the audio paper which I replied to was in the next step after feedback. One of my housemates spoke about me giving more substance to the things I’m stating. For example, there have been studies that show…
She states I should state the study and when speaking about studies or artists instead of saying just that. Saying their names and projects or work that they’ve done.
I will take this on board when rehashing my audio paper.
I also remember back to my one to one with Ingrid. She spoke about my plan for my audio paper structure which I believe I’ve followed. We agreed to start with speaking about what noise pollution is, why it’s bad for our well-being. The factual information. Then to continue on to my experience with noise pollution and why I felt motivated to write this. Finally, finish with sound artists and their current work and what this means for the future.
Perhaps when revisiting this feedback I remembered I should add more towards the ending, I only end up speaking about two artists. I might have spent too much time on the first part of my audio document which was the effects of noise pollution.